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dS Snippet: The Thrill of the Hunt

Fandom: due South
Summary: Diefenbaker's introduction to Chicago
Rating: PG
Length: 277 words
Challenge: ds_snippets challenge #1: First Time and Unseen
Thanks to: llassah for a quick and helpful beta

Dief and pack-Ben had traveled many places in pursuit of their rightful two-legged prey, but this was the worst.

In Chicago, the humans had gone mad. They covered every inch of earth with concrete, as if their cars needed the room more than their own young. They covered their bodies with false scents, trying to hide the fact that they were still animals. They lived piled together in tiny spaces that would have had rats snapping at each other.

A new scent yanked Dief's nose to the side. It was sweet as honey and rich as week-dead caribou. Dief wanted to lie down and wallow in it. He wanted to sink his teeth in its ruff and mount it. He wanted to devour it.

Dief ghosted through the building crowded with law-hunters and lawless-prey. Silent and unseen he tracked the scent to its source. Up these stairs. Down that hall. Through a door. Across the room.

There.

Dief bellied up to his target. A man sat at the desk, guarding his food. Dief waited … waited … waited … the man turned away. Dief launched himself with the speed and accuracy of a tendon slash, snatching his prize and retreating to the dark space under a nearby empty desk.

The man yowled loud enough to penetrate Dief's ears, tinny and distant. "Goddamn dog stole my Krispy Kreme!"

Mmmmm. Crispy. Creamy. It tasted even better than the scent had promised. Dief was licking his chops, eyes half-closed with pleasure, when the man's head appeared at the entrance to his den. Dief showed his teeth and gave him a friendly piece of advice. In contested territory, the slow go hungry.

Comments

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ithildyn
Feb. 8th, 2007 04:50 am (UTC)
I love it!! I have to show this to Nin --- her Krispy Kreme addiction just about killed me with fright one trip to the south [g]
keerawa
Feb. 8th, 2007 05:03 am (UTC)
*grins* Nice icon for the occasion. Their donuts are just so damned tasty!
ninjababe
Feb. 8th, 2007 10:51 am (UTC)
Ith, it was only a U-Turn through 3 lanes of traffic! :-)

I love this story... A perfect look into Dief's mind!
keerawa
Feb. 8th, 2007 02:22 pm (UTC)
Ah, the infamous Nin. Welcome!

*smiles* Glad you enjoyed.
malnpudl
Feb. 8th, 2007 05:01 am (UTC)
I love you.

So. Much.

*blushes*

Sorry, was that a bit excessive?

This is brilliant. I madly adore it.
keerawa
Feb. 8th, 2007 05:09 am (UTC)
No such thing as excessive enthusiasm when it comes to feedback.

*basks in the love* Thanks, malnpudl!
malnpudl
Feb. 8th, 2007 06:30 am (UTC)
Since I've declared my undying love, you might as well call me Mal. ;-)

Nice to meet you. :-)
keerawa
Feb. 9th, 2007 03:27 am (UTC)
A pleasure, Mal!
sdwolfpup
Feb. 8th, 2007 05:01 am (UTC)
This was hilarious. Something about Dief saying Mmmmm. Crispy. Creamy. is absolutely killing me.
keerawa
Feb. 8th, 2007 05:13 am (UTC)
Yeah, it's not only the name of his new passion, but a way to describe that wondrous taste.

*lolls her tongue happily* Thanks for letting me know you enjoyed!
brynnmck
Feb. 8th, 2007 05:11 am (UTC)
HEEEEE! Awesome. It's the beginning of a long and beautiful relationship.
keerawa
Feb. 8th, 2007 05:20 am (UTC)
Thanks, brynnmck!

Tragically, I've just researched and found out that the Krispy Kreme stores in both Canada and Chicago went bankrupt in 2005.

Maybe I need to write an angsty sequel.
mackiedockie
Feb. 8th, 2007 05:26 am (UTC)
Which makes it all the more tragic for Dief's victim--obviously his doting mother was sending him care packages of KK's from Memphis.

Dief needs his own series.
keerawa
Feb. 8th, 2007 05:38 am (UTC)
Well, I know they CLOSED in 2005. But the pilot was in, what, 1995? There could have been Krispy Kreme stores in Chicago then, right?

Stealing a man's Krispy Kreme under the circumstances mackiedockie has named would be an unforgiveable sin.

Dief fanfiction is among my very, very favorite genres in due South.
mackiedockie
Feb. 8th, 2007 06:24 am (UTC)
And how are you with Dief crossovers...*evul grin*
keerawa
Feb. 9th, 2007 03:27 am (UTC)
*makes the sign of the cross and backs away slowly*
shoemaster
Feb. 8th, 2007 05:27 am (UTC)
Oh Dief. Now I want a doughnut.
keerawa
Feb. 8th, 2007 05:39 am (UTC)
Me too!
primroseburrows
Feb. 8th, 2007 07:25 am (UTC)
*buys a dozen doughnuts, gives half to Dief*

Awww, this is great! More Dieffic needs to be written. :)
keerawa
Feb. 8th, 2007 02:19 pm (UTC)
*watches Dief accept the tribute*

Thanks, primroseburrows!
sam80853
Feb. 8th, 2007 03:36 pm (UTC)
Aw, Dief!

In contested territory, the slow go hungry.

That's a good piece of advice! GREATNESS!
a_boleyn
Feb. 8th, 2007 11:31 pm (UTC)
A hearty AMEN, brother Dief!

Creamy... mmmmm
keerawa
Feb. 9th, 2007 03:19 am (UTC)
*licks her lips*

Thanks!
keerawa
Feb. 9th, 2007 03:17 am (UTC)
My Dief Muse is full of bits of wolfy wisdom.

Love the icon!
indywind
Feb. 8th, 2007 08:52 pm (UTC)
:;loved Dief and all who write his stories::
keerawa
Feb. 9th, 2007 03:19 am (UTC)
Thanks for letting me know you enjoyed it, indywind!
chesamus
Feb. 9th, 2007 12:03 am (UTC)
In contested territory, the slow go hungry.

Or my family's motto: He who hesitates is last. Just love Dief stories...
keerawa
Feb. 9th, 2007 03:20 am (UTC)
Sounds like Dief and your family would get on just fine. Diefenbaker's just FUN to write.
sparklebutch
Feb. 9th, 2007 02:48 pm (UTC)
Love the doggie. Love. Also love the phrase "week-dead caribou". And the last line, so much.


(yes, I know is no doggie, I no care, as all pups are doggies in my world)
keerawa
Feb. 10th, 2007 02:41 am (UTC)
*grins* Just don't call Diefenbaker a doggie where he can see it!

Glad you liked it, sparklebutch!
spuffyduds
Feb. 18th, 2007 10:16 pm (UTC)
Wonderful! Funny and very much in a dog's brain. Well, I'm guessing, anyway!
keerawa
Feb. 20th, 2007 08:00 am (UTC)
Thank you, spuffyduds! I asked my dog to beta for me, but she just couldn't fit it into her schedule.
dswdiane
Feb. 21st, 2007 06:51 pm (UTC)
Yes, Keerwa, thanks. Actually I read this before and thought I had commented. Hmmm . . .brain is going.

But nice.
keerawa
Feb. 23rd, 2007 06:44 pm (UTC)
Thanks, Diane!
simplystars
Sep. 25th, 2007 05:18 am (UTC)
Oh, bwah! Donuts, the Dief-nemesis. Ha! (Though I am not a Krispy Kreme fan, myself... too sugary. :-P)

And I really like this:

In Chicago, the humans had gone mad. They covered every inch of earth with concrete, as if their cars needed the room more than their own young. They covered their bodies with false scents, trying to hide the fact that they were still animals. They lived piled together in tiny spaces that would have had rats snapping at each other.

The ugly truth. Harsh and undeniable.
keerawa
Sep. 25th, 2007 05:47 am (UTC)
too sugary Not an issue for Dief!
I thought Dief's alienation in Chicago was worth a little exploration. Thanks, simplystars!
ichthusfish
Sep. 7th, 2008 04:31 pm (UTC)
Oooh! Interesting :)

Nicely done. Very strikingly written. I could see this happening very clearly. Not sure what a Krispy Kreme is, but it definately sounds like a perfect Dief treat!

They covered every inch of earth with concrete, as if their cars needed the room more than their own young.

Perfect and tragic truth.
keerawa
Sep. 9th, 2008 02:55 am (UTC)
Krispy Kreme is a brand-name donut. It's funny, rereading this snippet, it really crosses the line from the tragic to the absurd in a very abrupt way. I suppose that's Dief's gift to Fraser, and to us all.
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keerawa
Apr. 6th, 2011 01:35 pm (UTC)
Hah! This was one of my first due South fics. I do love Deifenbaker!
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