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Untold Meme

Gakked from gryphonrhi:
Comment with a story (or vid) I've written, and I will tell you one thing I knew, learned, or wondered about while writing the story that didn't make it onto the page.

Given my non-linear writing method, there tends to be quite a lot of this stuff.

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akamine_chan
Feb. 6th, 2009 06:25 am (UTC)
keerawa
Feb. 6th, 2009 07:06 am (UTC)
The most important thing that didn't make it into the snippet-length version of that story is that Ray isn't just restless, he's resentful of being in this position, trapped and completely dependent. And while it doesn't really make sense to blame Fraser for that ... I wouldn't accuse anyone of being completely rational when upsdet, especially not Ray.

So going into Fraser's office, going through his stuff, lying down on and then stepping on his cot (with his boots on!) is a way of finding a refuge, and that's how he explains it to himself. But it's also a little slice of revenge. Ray's intruding here on a man who has almost no privacy, and he knows it.
akamine_chan
Feb. 15th, 2009 08:06 am (UTC)
Oh, that's great, k.

Of course he's resentful of being in that position and I can totally see him taking it out on Fraser in the subtle, sneaky way. And lying to himself as he does it. Oh, yeah.

Thanks for that peek into your brain and a behind-the-scenes look at one of my favorite stories...*g*

*hugs*
luzula
Feb. 6th, 2009 12:40 pm (UTC)
Death-Defying!

(I am so predictable.)
aqua_eyes
Feb. 6th, 2009 03:17 pm (UTC)
I second that. XD!
keerawa
Feb. 7th, 2009 06:14 pm (UTC)
OK, luzula, aqua_eyes, you've got it! I have so much to say here, where shall I begin ...

The title of 'Death-Defying' is a reference to what I consider the organizing principle of the story. Ray's journey through the story is told in a series of death-defying leaps. The first, Fraser offers him when they first meet on the roof. Ray won't jump. It's too far, and he can't swim. The 2nd, Fraser pushes Ray out of the van. The 3rd, Ray sees Fraser jump from the bridge and jumps after him. And in the final, purely metaphorical leap, Ray leaves behind everythign he knows to find Fraser. Fraser, in return, defies death by connecting with Ray.

I know the situation that Fraser saved Denny from. Oddly enough, Denny considered it too personal to tell, so I won't. But there is a settlement up North where Fraser is regarded with both respect and a touch of fear.

The Fraser I see in canon has an extraordinary amount of empathy for others. He's never learned to turn it off, the way we do and must. Fraser is like the child who cries because someone else is sad, hands all his money to the man begging outside the store, gives his coat to the girl at school who was cold.

The Fraser in this story has that character trait turned inwards on itself. As a result, he's far more damaged than I think comes across in the story. This Fraser understands others, intellectually, their motivations and priorities, so he can predict and manipulate them. But they are not real to him, and so he doesn't really care. He wants to be the hero of his own story, and so he follows certain ethical guidelines. But he is well aware that he's broken. And whenever someone gets close enough to him to become real, they die.

When Ray says, cuffed to that chair, that Fraser wouldn't hurt him, and Fraser insists he would, if it were necessary? He was telling the truth. It's only after that point, as Ray starts to become real to Fraser, that it becomes a lie.
aqua_eyes
Feb. 7th, 2009 06:41 pm (UTC)
Now I am very curious about Denny. And you know that story he half told ray, before he went and got himself killed? What happened next in that? Does Fraser teach Ray to swim? XD!

Yes, sociopath Fraser is quite scary. I have to confess I have only seen something like two episodes of Due South, but I had to download the podfic from the summery of Fraser is a killer for hire. XD!

I am also very curious as to what happens to them afterwards. I am usual terrible for leaving comments for podfic but I was really looking for a sequel. ^^;

I totally didn't get the connection of the death-defying leaps. I do like the way that Ray is so ready to jump at the end. ^^
keerawa
Feb. 7th, 2009 07:25 pm (UTC)
Well thank you, aqua_eyes, I appreciate you letting me know you enjoyed it! I doubt I'll write a sequel to this one, but I encourage other people to!

I totally didn't get the connection of the death-defying leaps
I think it's one of those connections that exists only in my brain, which is why I mentioned it.

Denny's story with the sled-dog that transforms intself into a human to get some time with the pretty daughter is a traditional Inuit tale, and is always told over a series of days. The version I found was rather dark, violent, and disturbing. In the end, the daughter gives birth to part-human, part-dog babies. Which is where the White Man comes from. Yeah, I'm not quite sure where Denny was going with that one. Maybe his version had a happy ending? Part of the oral story-telling tradition is that the teller changes the story according to the needs of the listeners.

I imagine that Fraser does teach Ray to swim, along with any other skill he thinks might help keep him safe.
aqua_eyes
Feb. 7th, 2009 11:07 pm (UTC)
^^

I wouldn't worry, I am dense like that.

D: Shame we'll never know.

*imagines them swiming in icey water* *cackles at ray*
birggitt
Feb. 6th, 2009 01:14 pm (UTC)
The Price of Interference, pretty please =D
keerawa
Feb. 7th, 2009 06:34 pm (UTC)
I learned to write? No, really, this was my first piece of non-fiction, and mackiedockie taught me how to write while beta'ing it.

There was a deleted scene in 'The Price of Interference' in which Richie came back. Joe catches sight of Jean-Pierre hopping off Richie's biike after they've spent the day together. Jean-Pierre has mimicked Richie's speech, and is generally pretending to be a young Immortal. It gave some interesting insights into Jean-Pierre, but interrupted the flow of the story, so snip-snip.

I know Jean-Pierre, my OC, inside and out. He was, in some ways, very innocent. Until Rwanda, he didn't believe that Mortals were a threat to him. I remember emailing a bunch of people for discussions about Highlander's (highly inconsistent) canon. Did a First Death have to be violent, to trigger the change? I wanted Jean-Pierre to have a first death with no touch of human malice. I considered disease and drowning before finally settling on letting him be trampled to death saving a pretty girl from a run-away horse. As I recall, the fact that it was painful was also important to me. I wanted the relief from pain to be among the first things he noticed upon reviving as an Immortal.

I wrote out the scene where Jean-Pierre met Grace and Carlos, working on the docks in (I can'tr remember which) harbor, trying to earn passage on a ship. Jean-Pierre can distinguish between different Immortals' Buzz, a combination of natural gift and training with Darius. He perceives them as musical notes, with tiny variations in pitch, intensity, and articulation. If I ever publish the third in the series, his perception of Methos is particularly interesting.
podfic_lover
Feb. 6th, 2009 07:54 pm (UTC)
Your vid 'Fallen Leaves',please (because I love it). :)
keerawa
Feb. 7th, 2009 06:40 pm (UTC)
Creating 'Fallen Leaves' reminded me that due South is a deeply optimistic show. It's about Fraser confronting the ugly reality of modern urban life with an open heart, and people rising to his expectations.

To me, the vid is from the POV of Chicago itself, listening to all these voices, crying for help, needing to be saved, doing everything they can to help and save others.

God, the ending makes me happy. It's a healing of wounds. *hugs*
mackiedockie
Feb. 7th, 2009 06:18 am (UTC)
And I follow Birggitt up with a query about The Secret War, because I love it!
keerawa
Feb. 7th, 2009 06:49 pm (UTC)
I know Ung far better than I want to. *shivers* He truly believes that Imortals are a threat to humanity, and his every move is calculated to remove that threat. In a way, Ung and Jean-Pierre are two sides of the same coin, men bent in two different directions by the same pressures in Rwanda and Cambodia.

This story made me really wonder about Methos. I know why Joe does what he does here. But Methos? When he showed the transcript of Ung's speech to Joe, what was he thinking? How about during that 'intervention' when he broke into Joe's office? He scared the crap out of me and Joe. And then, at the end. I can see why he'd plan to kill Ung. But why did he stop? Just because Joe asked him to? I honestly don't know.
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