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Fandom: Supernatural
Rating: PG
Author's Notes: Written for the spn_drabble prompt: 'space to breath'. Dedicated to devon99, who requested a series of AU drabbles.
Length: 100 words
Series: Let's call them Neverweres.
Spoilers: The Pilot, gone AU.
Summary: Dean's had one job, his whole life.
Disclaimer: These characters belong to Kripke.

Dean’s cell rings.

“Dad! Hey, you in town?”

“Palo Alto?” Dad’s voice is ashes.

Dean hasn’t heard him sound like that in years. Stomach tight, he pulls off onto the shoulder. “No, Blackwater Ridge. I followed your coordinates.”

Dean’d left Sam in Palo Alto last night, ignoring the instinct that would’ve sent him crawling back. Left Sammy to his interview, and his girl, and his nice normal life.

“Dean …” The line crackles with quiet static. “There was a fire.”

Take your brother outside as fast as you can! Don’t look back! Now Dean, go!

Dean hangs up the phone.

Comments

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whitereflection
Mar. 3rd, 2010 03:08 am (UTC)
Oh, that's chilling, and that ending stark. That's what a drabble should be--damned good impact with just a few words.
keerawa
Mar. 3rd, 2010 03:24 am (UTC)
Thanks, whitereflection. I seem to have this compulsion lately, to write about the brothers being APART. Which is interesting, because it's them being together that makes the show work for me.
tifaching
Mar. 3rd, 2010 03:55 am (UTC)
Ahh! I love alternate scenarios. God, if Dean hadn't gone back. If Sam hadn't been pulled out. Great drabble!
keerawa
Mar. 3rd, 2010 04:10 am (UTC)
And the thing is, there is absolutely no rational reason for Dean to say goodbye to his brother, drive off, and then show up at his door a couple minutes later to drag him out of that fire.

Thanks for commenting, tifaching!
blacklid
Mar. 3rd, 2010 04:30 am (UTC)
Ohhh, that IS chilling. Makes you go hmmmm.

See, when Dean came back to rescue Sam from the flames, I always chalked it up to the deleted scene from the Pilot: he drops Sam off and drives off, casually looks at the clock in the Impala and notes the date and the time, gets a bad "deja vu" feeling about the anniversary of it, and turns around just to drive by again... when he sees the smoke. There's no dialog and it's no longer than 30 seconds, if I remember, but it sure explained a lot. On the other hand, maybe it has something to do with that secret of Dean's from Bloody Mary that he's never talked about. *shrug*

keerawa
Mar. 3rd, 2010 02:39 pm (UTC)
Man, I need to get my hands on that deleted scene. Thanks for reading, blacklid!
blacklid
Mar. 3rd, 2010 06:42 pm (UTC)
If you have the season one DVDs, I believe that deleted scene is in the special feature extras somewhere.

Yes, I really liked this -- what if scenarios are fun right now -- I'll try to snag a read of the rest of them when I get a second.
orehime
Mar. 3rd, 2010 08:24 am (UTC)
Oh nice! And by nice, I of course mean evil!
keerawa
Mar. 3rd, 2010 02:40 pm (UTC)
*grins* Thanks, orehime!
starmage2
Mar. 3rd, 2010 08:46 pm (UTC)
This is the first I've seen where Dean doesn't go back and I love it and just wish there was more.
keerawa
Mar. 4th, 2010 03:17 am (UTC)
Ah, but the challenge is to evoke a reality in 100 words, and then let the reader's mind run with it. Thanks for reading, starmage2!
devon99
Mar. 3rd, 2010 09:43 pm (UTC)
Yay!! Awesome!!
Thank you, you did a great job with this.It just highlights how one simple decision could have changed the course of their lives.
Looking forward to more:)
keerawa
Mar. 4th, 2010 03:18 am (UTC)
This is just the kind of low-key writing challenge I need right now, so thank you SO much for suggesting it! Hinge-point AUs are my favorite kind.
akamine_chan
Mar. 5th, 2010 05:05 am (UTC)
Lovely and dark, keerawa. Perfect.
keerawa
Mar. 5th, 2010 06:37 am (UTC)
Thanks, aka!
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keerawa
Mar. 25th, 2010 05:40 am (UTC)
Of course! I'm trying to do something NICE for the boys, and it's unexpectedly difficult to pull off, but I'll definitely be posting more soon. ETA: Make that now.

Edited at 2010-03-25 01:52 pm (UTC)
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