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Fandom: due South
Pairing: Fraser/Kowalski
Rating: R for m/m sexuality and disturbing ideas
Length: 528 words
Summary: This is an AU ending to my AU "Guilty Until Proven Innocent." It makes no sense unless you've read the original fic.
Warnings: This ending is for readers who like their coffee black, their whiskey neat, their smokes unfiltered, and their fic dark. How dark? So dark I almost didn't publish it.
Thanks to: My beta reader slidellra, who encouraged me to post this ending.
Disclaimers: Fraser and Ray Kowalski belong to Alliance.



Ray found some not-too-scary frozen leftovers in his freezer and nuked them for lunch, then drove over to the park. He was early; had enough time to smoke three cigarettes and drive himself nuts with best-case and worst-case scenarios by the time Fraser appeared.

Fraser was dressed in jeans and a gray henley. He looked good. Fraser had always walked carefully, like he was being graded on good posture. Now he came up on Ray through the trees like a wild thing on the prowl. Fraser approached without a word and snagged Ray with a smile.

They walked silently down the path together. Ray figured he'd better get the conversational ball rolling before his head exploded. "So, how'd your appointment go?"

Fraser glanced sideways at him, and then looked back at the pond. "Rather well, actually. The RCMP has let me go, but I've come into some money my father left me." A few more steps down the path, Fraser paused. "This way," he said.

Ray followed Fraser down the slope and around a boulder to a private little spot near the water. Fraser sat down on the grass and stretched out his legs out in front of him. He closed his eyes and tilted his face up to the sun. Gorgeous. It made Ray wish he could draw.

Instead he plopped down on the ground across from Fraser and leaned back against the sun-warmed boulder. They sat there, not moving or speaking. Some crickets were making a racket in the weeds near the pond.

Chicago could be pretty nice in the springtime.

"Fraser," Ray said eventually, "about what happened in Florida. I never meant …"

Fraser opened his eyes. The look in them was hot and heavy. Ray felt his breath catch. "Ray, you were magnificent. Truly."

Fraser stretched sensuously, and then rolled to his knees. He crawled across the ground to Ray and slowly wet his lips. "And I think you deserve a reward. Don't you?"

Ray shivered as Fraser caressed his cheek with the back of his left hand and moved up his body for a kiss. He tilted his head, opened up, and Fraser's tongue was slipping into his mouth, better than any fantasy. Ray felt like he hadn't come in weeks.

Ray pushed up to rub himself along the front of Fraser's jeans. Fraser rocked against him, hard as iron. There was something strange … Fraser was packing. There was a gun in his pants, right next to that beautiful hard-on, where most guys wouldn't find it.

Fraser reached between them to unbutton Ray's fly. As he arched helplessly into the sensation, one tiny detail from the case suddenly sprang into Ray's mind, clear as day. The day Victoria had applied for her driver's license in Tallahassee? It was the day before Vecchio was shot.

There was no proof. No prints. No living witnesses. Just a drawing of a dead cop that didn't quite match any of the crime scene photos.

Then Fraser was jacking him, rough and perfect. Ray groaned into Fraser's mouth, and decided he'd done enough detecting for one fucking lifetime.

This was his reward. He'd earned whatever he got.

Comments

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shoemaster
Feb. 21st, 2007 01:04 am (UTC)
Ooh, that's scary. The idea of all of Fraser's focus going from Truth and Justice to uh, lies and evil is a scary one. And Ray just letting it slide...
keerawa
Feb. 21st, 2007 01:56 am (UTC)
What's really scary is that THIS Fraser was quite happy to tell me all about it. Some Muses you just don't want in your head.
dessert_first
Feb. 21st, 2007 02:48 am (UTC)
So. Damn. Good. I'm infinitely happy this was the *alternate* ending, not the *real*, *happy* ending I needed for, like my own personal mental health (such as it is). But it's very, very well-written, and quite intriguing. I really like how Ray sees it coming in that flash of insight... and opens himself up to his fate, enjoying the ride.

Then Fraser was jacking him, rough and perfect. Ray groaned into Fraser's mouth, and decided he'd done enough detecting for one fucking lifetime.

This was his reward. He'd earned whatever he got.


And, really... it's kind of a happy ending anyway, isn't it?
keerawa
Feb. 21st, 2007 05:57 am (UTC)
Definitely the alternate ending.

opens himself up to his fate
Exactly! At this point, Ray figures he deserves whatever he gets - a hot one-night stand, a round-the-world trip with a psycho bank-robber lover, or a bullet in the brain.

Sort of a twisted happy, but yeah.
viciouscats
Feb. 21st, 2007 03:01 am (UTC)
Wow. I LOVE it. Apparently, I'm brave and pervy. :)

Usually I'm all about happy ends and sweet and fluffy. So, I think what worked for me here is that it IS a happy end, nevermind the scary. Well, they are going to be together. Right? Right. I can work around that. :) Yes, I know, my morality is very low. :)
keerawa
Feb. 21st, 2007 06:04 am (UTC)
*grins* Glad you liked. Scary happy, sure, I can see that.
joannindiw
Feb. 21st, 2007 03:49 am (UTC)
oh. freakin'. wow.

I *like* this.

... and ok, I didn't think I was much for the dark ending; in fact I was almost didn't click, and after I clicked I almost didn't read but -

I like my whiskey neat and my coffee black (though I don't smoke) so I figured, why not...

and. Yes. Glad I clicked. makes that scene where Fraser sketches Vecchio dead just jump.
keerawa
Feb. 21st, 2007 05:53 am (UTC)
*chuckles* So my warning both enticed and repelled you...

Yeah. Fraser isn't mourning his dead friend. He's saying, 'You shot Victoria for me! Look, I shot someone, too.' *shivers*
mackiedockie
Feb. 22nd, 2007 06:49 am (UTC)
You make both scenes work equally well--the internal logic of the plot, characters and events lead to both endings. Both excellent endings!

Now *that's* scary.
keerawa
Feb. 23rd, 2007 06:52 pm (UTC)
Thanks, Cath, but you know how I write. I take NO credit for this ending. None.

It's not my fault Scary!Fraser started whispering in my ear, "I find it fascinating that both you and Ray just assume that I'm innocent."
lipsum
Feb. 26th, 2007 04:46 am (UTC)
Whoa. sociopath!Fraser scares the shit out of me.
keerawa
Feb. 26th, 2007 07:34 am (UTC)
Me too. But Ray seems to like him.
sam80853
Mar. 2nd, 2007 07:25 am (UTC)
Oh ... Oh ... This is ... good but ... ::hurries back to happy happy-ending::
keerawa
Mar. 2nd, 2007 07:37 am (UTC)
I'm right there with you, Sam! As I told my beta, "I wrote this noir ending, because I had to once it got in my head, but I don't like it."

Thanks for the comment!
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treewishes
Mar. 9th, 2007 05:34 am (UTC)
Mmmm, alternate ending WINS. Thanks for figuring a way to post it, too. This one will stick.
keerawa
Mar. 9th, 2007 08:48 am (UTC)
I like the other ending better, but they both exist in my head. I'm glad that I posted it; a surprising number of people seem to appreciate the noir ending.

Thanks for the feedback, treewishes!
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panijeziora
Mar. 17th, 2007 12:02 pm (UTC)
you horrible, horrible person.... :D godness... evil!freser....makes my day XD
keerawa
Mar. 17th, 2007 05:30 pm (UTC)
It was the Muses, honest.

Thanks for letting me know you enjoyed it!
akamine_chan
Dec. 5th, 2007 05:07 am (UTC)
No, I think this ending fits very well with the AU noir feel to the story. Remembering, of course, that Fraser is an iceberg - 99% of what he is lurks under the surface, hidden. So it's hard to see him as he really is.

Think about all the noir detectives that were done in by femme fatales - in this case, RayK being the cynical detective seduced by a dark Fraser. It worked for me, but then, I have a thing for bad boys...Fraser opened his eyes. The look in them was hot and heavy. Ray felt his breath catch. "Ray, you were magnificent. Truly."

Thanks for sharing this darker ending.

keerawa
Dec. 5th, 2007 05:50 am (UTC)
Bad!Fraser is totally a femme fatale. And it ties in with that moment when Ray's waiting in line at the prison and thinks back to all the times he's been taken in by a pretty face with a sob story. *keerawa pats herself on the back*

Now THIS Fraser is ready to hop in the sack, because getting away with murder is a rush, and he'd just love someone to share it with.

Yay Noir! Thanks, akamine_chan!
primroseburrows
Dec. 5th, 2007 10:38 am (UTC)
I maintain that the Fraser in this ending is not Fraser at all, but actually Patrick Kelly. They do look remarkably alike, they're both Mounties, and Ray hasn't known Fraser very long.

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Edited at 2007-12-05 10:39 am (UTC)
keerawa
Dec. 5th, 2007 02:43 pm (UTC)
Huh. Fascinating! He's an imposter!
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petronelle
Aug. 14th, 2008 04:29 am (UTC)
I love this ending with more fervor than I mustered for the first one. It's such a twisty story that the final knife-thrust of shattering illusions works very well for me here, even while it makes me worry about how long Ray will survive with this Fraser.
keerawa
Aug. 15th, 2008 02:18 pm (UTC)
I'm so glad the dark ending worked for you, Petra!

It's such a twisty story Huh. You know, I'd never considered it that way before. Of course, I pretty much always know both the start and ending of a story before I begin writing, so they don't often suprpise me. Now the middle, sometimes I'm stunned by how and why characters get to where they are at the end.

I'd say Ray's survival depends entirely on his flexibility. Fraser's enthusiastic about his new Ray, but I'm not sure if Ray will really be able to let go of his own moral code for a life with Fraser.
helens78
Sep. 14th, 2010 03:33 pm (UTC)
Eeee, I just read "Guilty" and then this ending, and I really, really liked "Guilty", but this ending killed me. This is fantastic, and works so well with "Guilty" -- there are all these clues that could easily be leading right here, so it works on both a story and a character level for me. It's great!
keerawa
Sep. 15th, 2010 01:45 pm (UTC)
Thanks so much! I found the noir/harlequin mix an uneasy balance all the way through the story, and found that at the end each genre called for it's own ending. And this one? So very, very noir. I'm delighted that you felt it was in character, and were able to look back and find those ambiguous little tells.

I appreciate the feedback, helens78!
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