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HL Drabble: Tightrope

Fandom and Characters: Highlander - Duncan/Amanda
Thanks to: My esteemed beta, killabeez, for helping me delicately prune 290 words down to 100.
Prompt: "Reflex Action" for highlander100, Challenge 139

Duncan's hands sweated under the rosin, and he felt distinctly underdressed in his bright orange tights. The Amazing Amanda's act was almost over when a juggling pin escaped their cascade. She reached, leaning off the tightrope while the audience gasped.

And she'd warned him, she had, but red hair and a cliff's edge flashed in Duncan's memory and he couldn't control the reflexive grab for Amanda's arm that made the false stumble real. Amanda plummeted into the net far below. She bounced out, bowing to thunderous applause.

Something about the set of her shoulders made Duncan wish for his sword.


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May. 26th, 2007 02:46 am (UTC)
Very nice. It's clear, it's believable, it's in character, it's vivid, and it's got a punchline.
May. 26th, 2007 03:34 am (UTC)
Thank you, dorothy!
May. 26th, 2007 03:17 pm (UTC)
That's really good. I can picture it very well in my head -- orange and red and crowds gasping.
May. 26th, 2007 04:51 pm (UTC)
Thank you, elistaire!
May. 26th, 2007 03:25 pm (UTC)
That IS really good. Tricky to tell whole story (including flashback!) in a drabble.
May. 26th, 2007 04:52 pm (UTC)
Oh, there was agonizing about how to manage it. I'd actually cut the flashback out, until killabeez showed me how to convey it in just a handful of words.
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