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Fandom/Characters: Due South; Victoria to Fraser
Rating: PG
Length: 269 words
Challenge: Written for lipstickcat in the Six Degrees Valentine's Day Cardathon
Notes: Thanks to my beta, nos4a2no9. I seem to have written an angsty Valentine. I know, it's a shocker. Pictures of the card can be found here.

Ben-

I think of you, sometimes.

Every time I let some fumbling idiot touch me, I remember the last time we were together, the last time I wanted to be touched.

I believed every word you said, the first time. Believed the look in your eyes that told me nothing else mattered, so long as we were together. And then you turned me in.

Time is strange in prison. At first, every time a guard walked past my cell, I thought he was coming to announce that I had a visitor, a phone call. Every morning I balanced on the sharp edge of hope. Evenings were a long, slow slide into another night’s disappointment. Finally I realized that my Prince wasn’t coming to save me; he couldn’t even be bothered to drop me a postcard. I stopped waiting for you. It was easier after that. The days settled on me, slow and cold and gentle as snowflakes, until I was buried under the years. When I got out, I tracked you down. I just wanted

It doesn’t matter.

Every time I end up on the run, another plan shot to hell, I know it would be different if you were with me. My beautiful, brilliant Ben. Kind enough to melt hearts. Cruel enough to shatter them. The marks would fall all over themselves to give you everything I have to take.

I had a layover in Chicago last week. I noticed that your Ray left while he still could, and that you’ve found yourself a blond. I wonder how you’ll break this one?

Don’t forget me.

- V

Comments

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ithildyn
Feb. 15th, 2008 04:27 pm (UTC)
Lovely!
keerawa
Feb. 16th, 2008 02:10 am (UTC)
Thank you, ith!
zabira
Feb. 15th, 2008 06:30 pm (UTC)
oh, keerawa! this was SO GREAT. it gave me chills, and i love it very much.
keerawa
Feb. 16th, 2008 02:14 am (UTC)
Thanks, zabira! The funny thing is, I got far enough into Victoria's head that people kept commenting that it gave them chills, and I couldn't figure out why for a time.

How's your Victoria fic coming, btw? The peek I had has me chomping at the bit for more!
zabira
Feb. 18th, 2008 08:38 am (UTC)
i didn't get this comment notification til just now...*sadface*

and YES, chills is about right. you did such a great job of articulating that tragic split between her world-view and ben's. i mean, she has a point, but she has also been twisted by her experiences and THAT IS SAD and FRIGHTENING.

as for me, i was stalled on her for a while, but am just now moving forward again. would you like to see the progress i've made since the last time i sent it to you?
keerawa
Feb. 19th, 2008 08:15 am (UTC)
Definitely twisted.

I'm glad to hear that she's speaking to you again! If you want a beta, I'd be happy to oblige. For my own pleasure, I prefer not to read WIP, so I'd wait for you to publish.
luzula
Feb. 15th, 2008 08:02 pm (UTC)
Wow, I really like that. The comment about the Rays at the end is so creepy, and the section about prison is beautiful and poetic.

Hmm, I don't understand this sentence: The marks would fall all over themselves to give you everything I have to take. "Marks" in what sense?

You do her perspective so well, the way she really believes she's been wronged.
keerawa
Feb. 16th, 2008 02:20 am (UTC)
Thank you, luzula! Jealous!Victoria is scary. A "mark" is the target of a scam, con, or theft - but not a pure burgulary. There's an implication that the victim is gullible or naive.

Victoria DOES think she's been wronged. The Ben Fraser she sees is almost unrecognizeable, but he nearly fits with canon. Nearly.
nos4a2no9
Feb. 16th, 2008 04:01 am (UTC)
\o/ It was hard not telling people who was the genius behind that creepy masterpiece, but I held firm and didn't breathe a word. *is tough* Once again, amazing card, Peaches!
keerawa
Feb. 19th, 2008 08:13 am (UTC)
Oddly enough, I feel less ownership of this than I normally do for stories I write. I feel like it's more lipstickcat's than mine. And maybe more Victoria's. It's a combination of the anonymity and the creation of a document by the character, I think.

And, my, you're good for my ego. *blushes*
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