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dS snippet: "Containment Breach"

Fandom; Characters: due South; Detective Jack Huey
Rating: PG
Word Count: 300
Challenge: Written for the ds_snippets Zombie Challenge #105, prompt: wail
Author's Notes: Written for akamine_chan, because she begs so prettily. Thanks to my betas, js_cavalcante and Steven.
Summary: 'Asylum' meets the zombie apocalypse. Not cheerful.

A siren wailed in the distance. Soldiers deployed rapidly from a dozen black Humvees, forming a defensive perimeter that covered both the Consulate and deserted street. Agent Carson got out of the car. I followed him up the stairs and knocked on the door.

It opened immediately. I flinched back, but it was just Fraser. He was clean-shaven, wearing a fresh uniform, and still looked dog-tired. “Detective Huey,” he greeted me.

Carson shouldered past me. “I understand you’re harboring a fugitive,” he said.

“Really?” Fraser’s polite smile didn’t reach his eyes.

“It’s a zombie,” Carson said.

“He,” Fraser corrected sharply, “And I would prefer a less derogatory term for those afflicted with Kampala Syndrome. My government has decided not to cooperate with your ‘containment policy.’ If you have public safety concerns, you’re welcome to station guards across the street. On U.S. soil.”

Carson pushed forwards as if to force the door. Fraser stood unmoving, staring him down. After a moment, Carson turned away, pulling out his satphone. Fraser started to close the door.

“Kowalski.” I asked, stepping up. “Is he …”

Fraser shrugged tightly. “As you might expect.”

“Look, I’m sorry,” my voice cracked. “I had to tell them.”

Fraser nodded. “No need to apologize. In extraordinary circumstances, each man must follow his duty. And his heart. It’s been an honor serving with you, Jack.” He held out his hand.

I shook Fraser’s hand, then saw the shape under his jacket. “You’re carrying.”

“It’s Ray’s,” Fraser said. His voice was tainted with a strange, dangerous laughter. “I had to confiscate it. We have strict gun control laws in Canada.”

“Okay,” I said, backing away. “But are you carrying it for us out here, or Kowalski in there?”

A muscle tensed in Fraser’s jaw. “Neither,” he replied, and closed the door.

Comments

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gloriana
Mar. 21st, 2009 07:37 am (UTC)
ooooh, this one is way cool!! I love dangerous!Fraser, and Jack's sympathy for Ray. Nice body language. This would make a good series :)
keerawa
Mar. 21st, 2009 08:12 am (UTC)
Thank you gloriana! I'm pleased that the body language came through, since I had to cut out a lot of the description to meet the word limit. Some snippets are full stories, but I think you're right, this is more of a teaser.
luzula
Mar. 21st, 2009 08:37 am (UTC)
Oh my God, what did you do to Ray? And wow, your Fraser here--he's so tightly controlled. It's like he's near the breaking point.

Fraser nodded. “No need to apologize. In extraordinary circumstances, each man must follow his duty. And his heart. It’s been an honor serving with you, Jack.” He held out his hand.

That is so Fraser!

typo that might screw up your word count: I flinched back, but it just Fraser.
keerawa
Mar. 21st, 2009 08:51 am (UTC)
Yeeeeah, Ray's not in good shape here. And neither's Fraser, for that matter. But he's determined to keep it together until the end.

And thanks for the catch, I fixed it. I feel like a pro-snippeteer; knew just what word would have to go.
mizface
Mar. 21st, 2009 12:27 pm (UTC)
Wow this was terrific. And definitely a teaser - I totally want more.

I love that Jack asked about Ray, and Fraser's response to his apology was wonderful. And the end was just... ouch.

Fraser has a homemade cure for Kampala Syndrome though - I just know it. *holds on to hope for the boys*
keerawa
Mar. 21st, 2009 06:14 pm (UTC)
Thank you, mizface! Of course Jack asked. I picture Fraser doing what needs to be done to care for Ray and keep him from harming anyone, constantly listening to CBC radio. (US being under government control and not very reliable) He's hoping for news that a cure's been found, even if he doesn't truly believe that it will.
love_jackianto
Mar. 21st, 2009 02:23 pm (UTC)
Oh that was great!

'It's Ray's,' Fraser said. His voice was tainted with a strange, dangerous laughter. 'I had to confiscate it. We have strict gun control laws in Canada.'
Poor Fraser, he's barely holding together, but I suppose seeing your friend turn into the undead will do that.
keerawa
Mar. 21st, 2009 06:14 pm (UTC)
*nods* It will indeed. Thank you for the comment, love_jackianto.
nos4a2no9
Mar. 21st, 2009 03:40 pm (UTC)
Ack! Peaches, that last line is devastating! Oh god. *sobs and sobs* Also, cool idea. I find zombie!fics really distressing, and this little snippet is a perfect example of the reasons why. Excellent writing, but the concept is so heartbreaking. *sobs some more*

Yes, I am a very delicate flower.
keerawa
Mar. 21st, 2009 06:18 pm (UTC)
I don't find the zombie apocalypse amusing. It's not the shambling hordes that bother me, it's these terrible choices. Thank you for letting me know how it affected you, Nos! *offers soothing Earl Grey tea*
akamine_chan
Mar. 22nd, 2009 12:31 pm (UTC)
It's not the shambling hordes that bother me, it's these terrible choices.

Which is why I love this kind of stuff. Will those choices break your character? Bend them a little? Shatter them beyond all hope of repair? Or make them stronger?
malnpudl
Mar. 21st, 2009 06:27 pm (UTC)
Oh, my heart! You broke it so beautifully.

You are, indeed, a master of the snippet form. Wow.
aqua_eyes
Mar. 21st, 2009 10:57 pm (UTC)
D:
keerawa
Mar. 22nd, 2009 12:04 am (UTC)
*attempts to decipher text-face* Is that a yikes?
aqua_eyes
Mar. 23rd, 2009 01:27 pm (UTC)
Sorry. That particular D: meant good fic but D:! Ray!

On the other hand it makes me think of Shaun of the Dead and having his mate in the garden shed to play computer games with XD!
akamine_chan
Mar. 22nd, 2009 12:33 pm (UTC)
His voice was tainted with a strange, dangerous laughter.

I love that line so, so much. It shows that Fraser's on the verge of breaking...

This was wonderful, keerawa. Thanks for indulging my zombie!craving...
keerawa
Mar. 23rd, 2009 05:46 am (UTC)
Thanks, aka. It's not terribly subtle, but I think it works.
plotbunniofdoom
Mar. 27th, 2009 11:52 pm (UTC)
Oh, I really like this.
keerawa
Mar. 28th, 2009 06:03 am (UTC)
Thanks for letting me know, plotbunnyofdoom!
plotbunniofdoom
May. 8th, 2009 11:41 pm (UTC)
Just re-read this from the rec-fest thinger and, OH Fraser! :(

*heart breaks a little*
keerawa
May. 9th, 2009 03:13 am (UTC)
*nods* Definite Not-Happy Ending, this one. Thanks for letting me know you came back for a reread, jo!
themadlurker
May. 2nd, 2009 08:40 pm (UTC)
gwah. Okay, that works way too well. Very, very chilling.
keerawa
May. 4th, 2009 06:38 am (UTC)
*smiles grimly* It still creeps me out, I have to say. Thank you for the feedback, madlurker!
devo79
Jul. 25th, 2009 07:44 pm (UTC)
Love this. So short and yet so damn well written.
keerawa
Jul. 25th, 2009 07:47 pm (UTC)
Thank you, Devo!
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