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dS snippet: "Inescapable Realities"

Fandom/Pairing: Due South; Fraser/Kowalski
Rating: PG
Length: 279 words
Challenge: Written for ds_snippets Amnesty challenge #21, prompt: window, jump, wait
Notes: Thanks to my beta, isiscolo.
Warnings: If you require them, don't read this one.
Summary: Just another morning up in the NWT.

Ben rolled over and stretched, preparing to get out of bed. Ray’s hand tightened on his arm.

“Stay,” Ray muttered, still half-asleep. Ben settled back down, warm against Ray's side, until the eastern horizon shone bright through the window. He gently moved Ray’s hand.

“Lil’ longer?” Ray murmured.

“Ray, I have to go. It’s time to feed the dogs,” Fraser said quietly.

Ray startled suddenly, frantically awake. “The dogs? What is it with you and the dogs? Storm of the century out there, and you decide to go feed the fucking dogs?”

Ben shushed him. “Ray, Ray, there’s no storm. Look, clear skies. Were you having a bad dream?”

“I … kinda. Ben …” Ray trailed off.

“We mustn’t neglect the dogs, Ray. Our responsibility to them is one of the ines-”

“Inescapable realities of life here,” Ray finished the sentence with him, resigned. “I know.”

Ben brushed a kiss over Ray’s forehead. “Why don’t you wallow for a few more minutes,” he said. “I’ll bring your coffee when I’m done with the dogs.”

The floorboards didn’t creak as Ben got up.

Ray ducked his head under the quilt and waited there for a few minutes in the silent cabin. Then he kicked off the covers and jumped out of bed. He pulled on the clothing he’d left by the side of the bed, singing “Cold, cold, cold,” under his breath. Ray turned on the radio, the morning news a background hum of voices. He shoved some more wood into the stove and set the kettle to boil water for his coffee. Ray pissed, brushed his teeth, put on his outdoor layers, and stomped outside to feed the dogs.

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akamine_chan
Apr. 4th, 2009 01:47 am (UTC)
Oh, keerawa, that's heartbreakingly subtle. Very good.
keerawa
Apr. 4th, 2009 02:02 am (UTC)
Thanks, aka, I worried about it being a bit too subtle. Isis helped!
meresy
Apr. 4th, 2009 01:57 am (UTC)
*woe*

Very pretty, but woe!
keerawa
Apr. 4th, 2009 02:03 am (UTC)
WOE! Lots of woe! I'm just glad to get it out of my head, you know?
mizface
Apr. 4th, 2009 02:01 am (UTC)
I'm echoing aka's comment. Subtle and so sad, and beautifully written.
keerawa
Apr. 4th, 2009 02:13 am (UTC)
Thanks, mizface. Now I need to go read some happy porn.
mackiedockie
Apr. 4th, 2009 04:29 am (UTC)
Oh, damn. The floorboards didn't creak.
keerawa
Apr. 4th, 2009 06:59 am (UTC)
They didn't. *sniffles* Thanks for reading, mackiedockie.
brigantine
Apr. 4th, 2009 05:17 am (UTC)
Ow, ow! *howls softly*

But really good, too. In a break my heart kind of way. Did I mention, Ow?
keerawa
Apr. 4th, 2009 07:00 am (UTC)
*offers a big hug* Thanks, brig.
luzula
Apr. 4th, 2009 08:04 am (UTC)
Oh, that hurts so good. Ray asking him to stay just a little longer. Oh god, and then "Were you having a bad dream?" And then Ray turns on the radio, so it won't be silent. Ow.
keerawa
Apr. 4th, 2009 08:43 am (UTC)
Yeah, the radio. *sobs*
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keerawa
Apr. 5th, 2009 07:53 am (UTC)
Thanks, miss_zedem. *offers a handkerchief*
caersmane
Apr. 4th, 2009 03:10 pm (UTC)
*reaches for the tissues* *sniffs* So well done.
keerawa
Apr. 5th, 2009 07:53 am (UTC)
*hugs* Thanks caersmane.
love_jackianto
Apr. 4th, 2009 03:51 pm (UTC)
Wonderfully sad story. I loved the subtlety.
keerawa
Apr. 5th, 2009 07:55 am (UTC)
Thank you for reading, love_jackianto.
thady
Apr. 4th, 2009 07:01 pm (UTC)
Oh, oh, this hurts. I love the subtlety of this, and how it hit me so much harder this way.
keerawa
Apr. 5th, 2009 07:55 am (UTC)
It sort of ... makes you an accomplice in your own pain. *hugs*
wihluta
Apr. 4th, 2009 07:51 pm (UTC)
Yeah, it's really not a good sign if the floorboards don't creak. *sniffs*

Well done!
keerawa
Apr. 5th, 2009 07:56 am (UTC)
Never a good sign. Thanks, wihluta.
isiscolo
Apr. 5th, 2009 01:16 am (UTC)
Oh, hurrah, I like what you ended up doing with this.
keerawa
Apr. 5th, 2009 07:56 am (UTC)
*smiles* Your sage advice made it much better, Isis.
plotbunniofdoom
Apr. 5th, 2009 02:05 am (UTC)
I actually let out an audible whine at the ending of this story. :(

Very well done and so so sad.

(I'm now imagining a sequel where it turns out Ben has come back to Ray as a ghost and it's not just a dream.)
keerawa
Apr. 5th, 2009 07:58 am (UTC)
Sorry to hear it, but also really pleased you had such a real, physical reaction. In this fandom, probably half of the readers assume Ben's a ghost. Of course, the interesting thing is, he doesn't seem to know it. I intentionally left it open to interpretation.
nos4a2no9
Apr. 6th, 2009 11:20 pm (UTC)
Ack! The pain! The sweet, sweet pain!

Lovely job, Peaches. Every word was perfection.
keerawa
Apr. 7th, 2009 01:56 am (UTC)
Glad you enjoyed, mein Kapitän of Angst!
gloriana
Apr. 10th, 2009 01:33 am (UTC)
I missed the import of the baby paragraph before the end - but then I knew I'd missed something, and went back and paid attention. Lovely idea, that Fraser comes to help him begin his day.
keerawa
Apr. 10th, 2009 04:49 am (UTC)
I really appreciate you teling me about how the reading went for you. I'd been imagining that people would finish it, go, "Wait. That doesn't make sense. Why..." and go back to reread, but I wasn't sure if that was what was actually happening.
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